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Sorry for the delay, I was just not quite ready!   

</span>But here it is!

 This bit is filled with stuff that I only ever did in the background in the original, so now it’s coming up front where it belongs.   I was so excited about the song in this one, I was screaming. 
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I read this days ago but I've just been so fucking busy, I can't believe it, and my business isn't caused by fun thing, let me tell you. But I'm here now, sitting down and writing a comment! Yay!

THIS CHAPTER!!!!

I'm gonna say this first 'cause it's the only thing that I kinda didn't like about this chapter (I also liked some things about it though so I have mixed feelings) so I can throw roses around all I want afterwards. But yeah, the dialogue between Edgar and Tenna! I think it could've been a little more subtle, you know? You generally have a cool way of giving information by showing actions and reactions and...events... this is really hard to explain (as you can probably tell, english is not my first language and I just feel crippled right now) but like, maybe some things they talked about could have worked better if you showed them insted of explaining?

BUT I really like the way Tenna went behind Johnny's back, and I really really love how she isn't afraid of Johnny at all. : D It seems like, for Tenna, Johnny is just some guy with personality traits she has to work around. Edgar-vision is so glorifying at times it's really awesome you shit (or Tenna shits) all over Johnny's Super Special Snowflakyness sometimes.

Like, like Johnny getting spooked and falling over, the shoulder thing, the! You know! I loved that. I love clumsy Johnny. He's so HUMAN. It's freaky.

ALSO JIMMY IN A TUTU

IT NEEDS TO HAPPEN

Also, like Silverykitsune pointed out, Johnny is a lot more flirty in this version. I think it makes sense, I mean, he already had a thing with JIMMY, so he can't be completely clueless, you know, about... I don't know. It just makes sense. Also that's how attraction generally works. You're just drawn to somebody.

I think maybe one of the best, or THE best part, was the part where Johnny rants at Edgar about... oh, hell, I'll copypaste.

“Because this is it! There's only the five of us! We've already – Why do this now when we're young and stupid and can ruin everything?  Why ruin it at all?  Why obsess over it or give it any more thought than acknowledging the idea that our brains are full of surging chemicals and failing electrical signals?”

YES JOHNNY YOU ARE CLEARLY TALKING ABOUT SOME NON-SPECIFIC SITUATION.

I also liked that Johnny told Edgar not to belittle himself. That's cool. Johnny's horrible, but not like, evil. And wants good things for Edgar. Yay.